Senior Exit Interviews, Wednesday, December 2
Do not make after school plans. I have no control over your assigned time.
Learning Target: I can analyze my perspective news story for the 5 w's and h of news writing, so as to organize the steps I need to write a successful story.
Assignment: due by Sunday, December 6 Your own news stories. General directions: 250-300 word maximum
unbiased!
solid lead
at least one quote
headline (watch capitalization rules!)
no passive voice
punctuation / grammar
remember this is not an essay; you have very small paragraphs. See model at the end of the blog.
remember this is not an essay; you have very small paragraphs. See model at the end of the blog.
All news stories must be posted on the blog.
Are you getting right? Read the rubric and grade yourself.
For today, I am asking you to make your selection and post.
Topic choices below: see me, if you have
another idea. Post to the blog with
your name, your story selection with six
questions relating to the 5 W's and H.
For example: Parker
I have decided to write a story about male students' footwear.
Who: Senior male students at SOTA (I've decided to narrow my topic)
What: check out a dozen pairs of footwear; note colors / brands. I need to do some background research.
When: I need to talk to three people. Do they wear the same shoes everyday? Get some quotes; make sure I spell their names correctly.
Where: where do they purchase footwear? malls? independent shops? on-line? Goodwill?
Why: Why these styles?
How: How do they feel in wearing this footwear? Identify with someone? Personal identity?
There will be duplicates; that's fine. All news articles must be posted to the blog by the end of class on Tuesday. If you are having problems, you'll know when you post today. I suggest you create a word document and copy and paste, so as not to lose your work.
Suggestions
parking woes
college application pressures
traffic tickets
body art
cliques
sports / teams at SOTA- this can be broken down into subtopics
volunteerism at SOTA- this can be broken down into subtopic
school security: morning scanning / during the day
riding the bus
lunch excursions
bumper stickers
measuring up to an older sibling
passing time in the hall
detention
electronics
personalizing a locker
part time jobs
tardy / absenteeism
hair styles: male / female
behind the scene: theatre / teching, etc
life as a middle schooler
senior economics
vending machines
fashion: male / female---choose an item
the reality of senior year (economic / social / frustrations / fears)
the reality of senior year (economic / social / frustrations / fears)
have you an idea for something more serious?
Rubric for evaluating inverted pyramid stories
Ace reporter
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Good
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Fair
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Poor
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This story — so professional one would think it were cut from a professional news publication — convincingly demonstrates mastery of the inverted pyramid form by doing the following:
❍ with precision, arranges the key facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ relegates background information — information the writer could have known before the event — to a place below all new information
❍ is devoid of unattributed opinion
❍ artfully illustrates points with interesting, well-punctuated and well-attributed quotations; a transition is used to introduce each quotation.
❍ is a model of brevity, using few words to maximum effect.
❍ avoids passive voice except in the rare cases when it is merited
❍ shows few, if any, errors in the conventions of written English
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This solid inverted pyramid story, while not as impressive as that written by the Ace Reporter, consistently does most or all of the following:
❍ arranges the key facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ generally relegates background information — information the writer could have known before the event — to a place below all new information
❍ is devoid of unattributed opinion
❍ illustrates points with interesting, well-punctuated and well-attributed quotations; a transition is used to introduce each quotation
❍ is for the most part concise
❍ generally avoids passive voice except in the rare cases when it is merited
❍ shows few, if any, errors in the conventions of written English.
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This story suggests general awareness of the requirements for an inverted pyramid story, but does not suggest great prowess in meeting those requirements. This lead does much or all of the following:
❍ unconvincingly arranges the facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ in some cases, fails to keep background information in its place at the bottom of the story
❍ may include minor unattributed opinion
❍ sometimes illustrates points with quotations but may do so awkwardly and without adequate transitions or
❍ shows too little attention to the need for brevity
❍ may slip into passive voice
❍ shows some errors in the conventions of written English.
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These story doesn’t meaningfully address the assignment. This lead does much or all of the following:
❍ either does not have all the basic facts or shows clear errors in organizing them from most to least important
❍ fails to keep background information in its place at the bottom of the story
❍ is bereft of meaningful, supportive quotations; may fail to introduce quotations at all
❍ includes significant unattributed opinion
❍ noticeable over-use of the passive voice
❍ is wordy
❍ shows multiple errors in the conventions of written English.
(Note: The fact that a person is speaking to students is not in and of itself newsworthy; stories should focus on what a person says, not the fact that he/she has spoken.)
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EXAMPLE NEWS STORY
Kalvon Morrison
ReplyDeleteMs. Parker
Journalism-5
20 November 2015
I have decided to write a story about the reality of senior year. For me is balancing out school (dance concert, academics and work)
Who: SOTA Seniors students who are struggling between personal and school life.
What: What is it that these seniors are struggling with or trying to balance out? (Economic, social) What are their everyday thoughts?
When: ask about 3 students, when do they have time for friends? When do they have time to work when they need the money right away? (If they have a job). Get quotes and do three interviews.
Where: Where is the settle down areas? Areas to study or down time? Library? In a study hall? At home?
Why: Why do they choose these electives or choose to have a job during these rough times of sports, dance, etc.
How: How do these students juggle between the two? How do they feel about balancing their struggles? Stressed? Overwhelmed? Depressed? Confused?
Aurion Powell
ReplyDeleteMs. Parker
Journalism
20 November 2015
News Story Topic
I have decided to write a story about what happens behind the scenes of Dance Concert.
Who: SOTA Dance Majors involved in Dance Concert/Student Choreographers
What: What happens during Dance Concert; rules and regulations, rehearsals, choreographers and their choreography.
When: I need to talk to four people. When do they rehearse? When does the schedule change?
Where: Where do they rehearse?
Why: Why do you choose to participate in Dance Concert? Why do you rehearse from October to February?
How: How do they feel doing the choreography? How do they feel after rehearsals? How does dancing effect you and your personal life? How do you choreograph? How did you choose the dancers that will perform in your Dance Concert piece? How many hours do they rehearse a week?
Ceyonna-
ReplyDeleteMale basketball varsity team
Who: Male basketball varsity team at SOTA
What: interview players; inspiration? Why basketball? Contrast of other sports? NBA? How does it impact other parts of their life?
When: is this daily? Yearly? How important is this?
Where: practice, games, etc.
Why: Why not another sport? Why a sport at all? Other interests? (Sports wise)
How: how do you feel playing this sport? How does this help you out in life? How will this help your life in the future? Is it a hobby or a passion?
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ReplyDeleteAlyssa Schulwitz
ReplyDeleteParker
Senior Journalism
20 November 2015
I chose to write about the reality of senior year, like applying for college, getting accepted, keeping up with grades, etc.
Who: SOTA seniors who are afraid of falling behind and fears of college
What: Why are the seniors scared about college and grades?
When: ask a few students about how they feel about college, do they feel pressured? Are their grades good/bad? Scared about the reality of paying so much money to further their education? Take notes and quotes.
Where: go to their assigned counselor (or any counselor)? Are they scared financially for college? (i.e. “how am I going to pay for college?”) To go to college, or to not go to college?
Why: why do they feel this way, can they talk to anybody about it, or are they scared?
How: what do they do to not worry? How do they actually feel? Is college right for them? Depressed, pressured, confused, stressed?
Samantha Symes
ReplyDeleteLevel of Preparation for College
Who: Male Senior from Brighton High School, Female Senior from Pittsford Sutherland High School, Female Senior from School of the Arts
What: Interview these three people about how prepared they feel for college. Level of preparedness that they have achieved from their separate high schools and from their teachers. Level of school/home encouragement/help.
When: How far along are they with applications? When are they handing it in? I will get quotes from them and tie the three schools together.
Where: Where do you go to school? Where do you do the most work on your Common App/other applications?
Why: Why do you feel this way? Why do you prefer this method over the other? Why do you feel more encouraged in a certain place?
How: How do you feel about college? How prepared do you feel?
Saisha:
ReplyDeleteI decided that I would like to write a news story on cliques in high school.
Who- Students and/or teachers at SOTA.
What- What kind of cliques are in nowadays? What influences them? What makes people so afraid to branch out of their usual social circle? What kind of things happen between cliques? Is there bias against one another?
When- When was it established that a certain group was "good" for you? When did cliques first started forming or when did cliques started "taking over" schools?
Where- School of The Arts and out of school. Does where you are affect who you hang out with?
Why- Why do you think social groups typically have a negative reputation? Why do you surround yourself with them/one?
How- How does being in a clique affect who you are, who you hang out with, and/or your focus in school?
Aleah Adams
ReplyDeleteTopic: Sports/Teams at SOTA
Subtopic: Underrepresented Sports at SOTA
Who: Both genders, involved in Varsity Bowling and Varsity Swimming
What: Interview members of the sports and grasp how they feel on being underrepresented and how they don’t get recognition. Do some background research on how well the teams have performed.
When: I can talk to Brittnee, who’s Captain of the Bowling team whenever, but I need to figure out who does swimming. How do you feel? What can be done for you to be more represented? How do you feel being conjoined with another highschool?
Where: Where do you guys practice?
Why: Why do you think your sport isn’t recognized? Why don’t people give you guy’s credit?
How: How can your sport become more popularized? How can it be more appealing?
Caz
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about the pledge of allegiance use in school.
Who: Everyone (teachers, students, administrators ect.)
What: If they believe in saying it in school/ if not just standing with respect.
When: Talk to a couple students, an administrator and teachers. Get quotes on if they believe and if not why.
Where: Where else in the world do cultures pledge allegiance? I will do research into that.
Why: Why do we do this in school? Why do we feel the need?
How: How does it make you feel saying the pledge? How does it affect your personal freedom?
William McDonough
ReplyDeleteMs. Parker
A look at the production and rehearsal process of a SOTA show.
Who: The students involved in the play
What: The dynamics between members of the production. The enormous amount of effort and cooperation that is required to achieve a successful run of performances
When: Withing the next week, these days will be the most challenging and rewarding rehearsals for SOTA’s winter show, Mary Poppins.
Where: School of the Arts theatre, theatre that SOTA students may be involved with outside of school.
Why: What drives people to perform? Why do they commit such a huge amount of their time to something that is so difficult?
How: How does the rehearsal process develop? How does communication between cast members and directors work?
Zoë
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about double standards.
Who: Celebrities
What: look up double standards in the industry. I need to look up background info on songs and award shows.
When: I need to look online. I can try to get opinions from students at SOTA. When is the double standard okay? Who can do the certain thing? Would you be okay if the opposite gender did this?
Where: where does this happen the most?
Why: Why is it okay for people to do this?
How: How does it make you feel.
Christian Simmons
ReplyDeleteI chose to write about the sota basketball team first game
Who: the school of the arts basketball players
What: a basketball game with school of the arts vs Bloomfield bombers
When: what is the date wand what time is it?
Where: where is this located?
Why: why would people want to come?
How: how would they get there and home?
Michele Wright
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about electronics.
Who: SOTA seniors
What: What they do, what’s the purpose
When: Interviews, surveys
Where: where are they when used most often
Why: why spend so much/little amount of time
How: how does it affect you (socially)
Katrina McCullough
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story on body art but specifically tattoos and the different opinions on what they mean/represent and how people feel about the life time commitment to them.
Who: People with and without tattoos
What: Get people's thoughts about their tattoos, why they chose to get what they did, and how they feel about the fact that they last forever.
When: Interview people with and without tattoos in the next couple of days.
Where: All around, at home, my friends, and others.
Why: Why did they choose to get what they did? What made them want tattoos? Do they ever think they will regret anything they put on their body that is a tattoo?
How:How does this effect your life, long term and short term. How has this changed anything socially for you? How do people without tattoos look upon people with tattoos?
Brittnee Johnson
ReplyDeleteCliques
I have decided to focus on the cliques of the senior class and how we are divided by either our majors or our action.
Who: SOTA Senior Class
How we are all divided into different groups
What makes us apart of a clique?
When did this clique start?
Why do cliques form so fast? Why do are people drawn to each other in this way?
ReplyDeleteBrandon
I have decided to write a story about measuring up to an older sibling.
Who: Younger siblings who have successful older siblings.
What: ask students about parents expectations based off of older siblings achievements.
When: I need to talk to people who might be the older sibling the younger ones have to measure up to and someone who has to measure up to their older sibling(s).
Where: where did/ do your siblings go to school? where does your sibling work if they have a job?
Why: Why do they feel like they have to measure up to them?
How: How do they feel about getting measured up? Does it bother you?
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ReplyDeleteAnn Schrader
ReplyDeleteGovernment Mock Election Poll Results
My group in our Government class decided to give out a mock election for 2016 to some of the Social Studies Classes. The results were pretty interesting and I'd like to share them.
Who: SOTA seniors giving out the poll and the under class men who took it.
What: The results of the mock election
When: The week before Thanksgiving break.
Why: What are the political trends in in our school and why? How informed do people believe they are?
How: How do these political trends differ among different ages, sexes and social studies classes.
Quasia Constantine
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about the experience of senior year.
Who: Senior Students at School of The Arts. Administrators and teachers as well.
What: How expensive has senior year been? Have your friendships fallen apart? Have you gotten into the colleges you want to? What is your plan after high school? How has the college application process been like for you?
When: After thanksgiving break, I need to talk to seniors. How are they feeling about senior year? Are they stressed? Happy? Anxious? Get some quotes; make sure I spell their names correctly.
Where: School of the Arts.
Why: Why has senior year been (the way one is currently feeling)?
How: How do you feel about senior year? What has it taught you thus far? How do you plan to finish? What’re your goals by the end of the year?
Alenna Streeter
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about the use of online course material (such as in journalism)/virtual courses
Who: Senior students at SOTA
What: find out the prominence/ general consensus of student opinion toward computer contained class material
Where: Where do these students access the material? Only in school? Mostly at home? Only occasionally at home?
When: talk to seniors about what classes they use computer recourses, compared to traditional classroom settings (chalkboard or whiteboard, notebooks and textbooks)
Why: why do they believe it is beneficial? Not beneficial? Would they prefer more online classes or less? Would they have chosen differently if they had known the structure of an online class?
Weston Costello
ReplyDeleteMs. Parker
Journalism
30 November 2015
I have decided to write about the reality of senior year.
Who: SOTA Seniors who are having issues balancing school and personal life. (Sports, College apps, etc.)
What: what are seniors thoughts on how they are trying to balance their lives and continue to be successful, what have they have to overcome to be where they are currently this school year.
When: Interview seniors, ask what things are they focusing on and what they are trying to balance out and if they are successful in the ways they are going about being balanced.
Where: when do they have time to study? Have time with friends? Down time or time for themselves?
Why: Why did they choose the classes they did or why did they choose these certain extracurricular activities.
How: how do these individuals feel about balancing their lives between all the things they do is it causing stress? Confusion?.
Jacob Eckhaus
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write about the dress code at SOTA.
Who: 9-12 graders, no other selected criteria
What: What are people's opinions on the dress code, and it's effects on the school enviornment.
When: I will use the data from the poll I conducted for AP Gov last month as the basis for my article.
Where: Here at SOTA
Why: Why is the dress code the way it is based on the findings of the survey.
How: How does the dress code make people feel?
Chyna Collins
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about tattoos
Who: People at School / Family , Friends
What: What the tattoos are of.
When:When they got or want tattoos
Where: School and home
Why: Why they got the tattoos they got
how: How do they decide what to finally get.
Jaymee Pride
ReplyDeleteI am going to write a story about the history and use of the Main Street Armory
Who: Who built it? Who once owned and currently owns the building?
What: What has the space once been used for and what is it used for now?
When: When was it built, bought and sold?
Where: Its part of our local community, many flock there for events.
Why: What was the building's original purpose and what is it used for today?
How: How to get information on events happening at the Armory and where and how to purchase tickets for it's various events.
Nicholas Walker
ReplyDeleteI’m going to write about leaving school during lunch periods.
Who: Who is allowed to leave?
What: What do they choose to do when they leave? What do they buy? Do they pack their own lunch?
Where: Where do they go?
When: When do they leave? How long are they out? When do they start coming back?
Why: Why are specific grades allowed to leave?
How: How do they get around? How do they decide what to do?
Devon Slone
ReplyDeleteMs. Parker
Journalism 15-16
December 3, 2015
I have chosen to write about the reality of senior year and how it can take a toll on students and parents economically.
Who: Seniors at SOTA who feel that the costs of being a senior isn’t what they expected economically and if they feel overwhelmed by this.
What: Do you feel you were well equipped going into senior year economically? Do you have a job? Do you feel like you should have gotten a job at an earlier age to help prepare for senior year?
When: Interview about 3-4 seniors on how they are handling the expenses of senior year?
Where: Where is the money coming from to pay for these expenses? Where do you work? Where would you like to work?
Why: Why do you not have a job? Can you not find one? Do you not want one?
How: How do manage your money? How do you feel spending your money on these expenses?
Jacob Gilbert-Mahoney
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write a story about foreign exchange students.
What: Classes foreign exchange students have participated in. Benefits they provide.
Who: Students who have met with foreign exchange students/foreign exchange students.
When: Talk with a few people. Did you enjoy their company in class?
Where: Which classes they took and for how long?
Why: Why do they stand out?
How: How did they help/impede the learning experience? Class environment?
Austin Hammond
ReplyDeleteI have decided to write my article on the difficulties of senior year and how it affects the already stressed students.
What: financial situations, deadlines, classes etc.
Who: all seniors
When This school year (or rather every year for seniors)
Where:At school
Why: Because i know the struggle and senior year is difficult. Why does everything cost money?
How: How can you possibly afford senior year?