Reminder: no electronics in class
This is your opportunity to complete the stories. The expectation is that everyone is focused on this work. If you have completed the story, you may work on material for another class or read a book. YOU MAY NOT EXPLORE VIDEOS OR PLAY GAMES ON THE COMPUTER.
New unit on Monday.
You have the next to days to work on your news stories. If you need to gather information, ask for a pass.
Remember that these are due by midnight Sunday, December 6
Very important: these are writing grades and will count in the 50 % category.
All stories should be posted on the blog for this date. If you send it to me, I will post it.
Be mindful that we are sharing these. Proof read!
Grading rubric: How does yours measure up?
Ace reporter
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This story — so professional one would think it were cut from a professional news publication — convincingly demonstrates mastery of the inverted pyramid form by doing the following:
❍ with precision, arranges the key facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ relegates background information — information the writer could have known before the event — to a place below all new information
❍ is devoid of unattributed opinion
❍ artfully illustrates points with interesting, well-punctuated and well-attributed quotations; a transition is used to introduce each quotation.
❍ is a model of brevity, using few words to maximum effect.
❍ avoids passive voice except in the rare cases when it is merited
❍ shows few, if any, errors in the conventions of written English
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This solid inverted pyramid story, while not as impressive as that written by the Ace Reporter, consistently does most or all of the following:
❍ arranges the key facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ generally relegates background information — information the writer could have known before the event — to a place below all new information
❍ is devoid of unattributed opinion
❍ illustrates points with interesting, well-punctuated and well-attributed quotations; a transition is used to introduce each quotation
❍ is for the most part concise
❍ generally avoids passive voice except in the rare cases when it is merited
❍ shows few, if any, errors in the conventions of written English.
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This story suggests general awareness of the requirements for an inverted pyramid story, but does not suggest great prowess in meeting those requirements. This lead does much or all of the following:
❍ unconvincingly arranges the facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ in some cases, fails to keep background information in its place at the bottom of the story
❍ may include minor unattributed opinion
❍ sometimes illustrates points with quotations but may do so awkwardly and without adequate transitions or
❍ shows too little attention to the need for brevity
❍ may slip into passive voice
❍ shows some errors in the conventions of written English.
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These story doesn’t meaningfully address the assignment. This lead does much or all of the following:
❍ either does not have all the basic facts or shows clear errors in organizing them from most to least important
❍ fails to keep background information in its place at the bottom of the story
❍ is bereft of meaningful, supportive quotations; may fail to introduce quotations at all
❍ includes significant unattributed opinion
❍ noticeable over-use of the passive voice
❍ is wordy
❍ shows multiple errors in the conventions of written English.
(Note: The fact that a person is speaking to students is not in and of itself newsworthy; stories should focus on what a person says, not the fact that he/she has spoken.)
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Basketball: what’s the big deal?
ReplyDeleteBy: Ceyonna Trotter
All over the United States is a popular sport. Whether you play it professionally or just at the park, the game has always been a favorite for many different age groups.
High school basketball is very competitive because athletes long for the ultimate achievement: winning the championship. School Of The Arts boys’ varsity basketball team went 20-3 in the 2014-2015 season, playing for the spot to go to states. Unfortunately they lost to Greece Athena.
The players that made this possible were the sectionals MVP, Christian Simmons, averaging 21.5 points per game, the point guard Sergio Alicea averaging 10 points per game, and James Clarke who averaged 10 points per game with his wonderful defensive performance.
So which sport is the most popular? The NFL has been the most popular sport for 30 years in a row. In 2014, 35 percent of fans call the NFL their favorite sport, the MLB at 14 percent, college football at 11 percent, auto racing at 7 percent, the NBA at 6 percent, the NHL at 5 percent and college basketball at 3 percent, says Darren Rovell, ESPN senior writer. So now the question is why basketball not the most popular?
Simmons says: “he doesn’t understand why football is more popular than basketball. People just like hitting each other in football.” This season, the player’s points per game of the SOTA boys’ team has increased significantly. Christian Simmons now averaging 35 points and James Clarke averaging 26 points. He plays the sport as a daily like a routine. Simmons says “he’s been playing basketball his whole life, tried football but it wasn’t for him.” He doesn’t plan on going to the NBA, but will be playing the sport in college.
Sports helps kids stay interacted in school and helps kids escape the other troubles in their life.
my favorite one so far!!! everybody should come our and watch the sota boys this year also!! in my opinion basketball is the #1 sport.
DeleteAside from minor grammatical errors, informative article. I like the way you added the statistics of the players and a quote from someone from our school.
Deletecatching a few grammatical errors also, but didn't deter me from reading the rest of the article and I agree that sports to keep kids involved and help them escape reality in some ways but also help them overcome their struggles.
DeleteCollege Applications
ReplyDeleteWreak Havoc on High School Students
By Samantha Symes, SOTA Student
High school students across Monroe County have been struggling to complete their college applications over the course of the past two hectic months. As senior students begin the process of establishing their futures, it is clear that many roadblocks are being endured.
There is an audible plea resounding in the high school community--a demand for more college-related high school programs, less pressure from the higher-ups, and more attentive responses from adults at home. In an interview with three high school students in attendance at School of the Arts, Brighton High School, and Pittsford Sutherland, it was expected that differences concerning college preparedness would be discovered. However, it was uncovered that students seem to face many of the same difficulties, regardless of the establishment that they attend.
“The school that I go to is specifically based around college,” says Casey Sheils, a senior student in attendance at Pittsford Sutherland High School. Having previously attended School of the Arts herself, Miss Sheils noticed a tangible difference between the importance of college between schools. “Everything is done to ensure success in college and getting into college.”
The abundance of pressure that students feel when they’re at school increases their chances of working on college applications, such as the Common Application. All three of the students interviewed admitted that they felt less motivated to work at home due to distractions. There also appears to be a disconnect between parents and their knowledge about college essays and supplements.
Each school lays claim to programs and meetings that are designed to prepare high school seniors for the tumultuous world that is applying to college. Grace Keller, a School of the Arts senior, said, “9-11th grade I was involved in AVID. This helped significantly in learning about college, the SAT, and how to take steps beyond high school.”
Though schools do provide some options for preparation, there are things left to be desired. All three students are in different stages of the college application process. As they struggle through the difficulty of writing supplemental essays, filling out forms, and discovering which colleges are the right fit for them, it’s clear that high schools are lacking in preparation. Support and guidance may not always be enough; Will Andrews from Brighton High School had hoped that there would be more programs available for understanding the college application process.
“I feel that schools should focus more on the reality of college, not just the academics,” Will said. “Everything is very high pressure.”
It definitely seems that high school and college collaboration is lacking. While applications are becoming a primarily online-based task, it seems that both teachers and families are losing touch with their struggling students. Awareness of the pressures of the college application process will be essential in aiding high school seniors in deciding what exactly they hope to get from their future.
Like the fact 3 different high schools were picked because its a totally different environment other than the one we know and is already used to (SOTA)
DeleteI'm pretty sure that this is probably the most relevant news story for senior students to relate too. Haha, I think that alone makes the news story stand out. Good job!
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Deletethis is very relataeble topic and " everything is very high pressure " is what grabbed my attention because it overall expresses how a college applicant may be feel and the whole article gets into detail about what negatives and posotive aspects of the process.
This topic is something that every senior relates to. By having the people that you interviewed be from different high schools, shows how much each school takes the college application process.
DeleteFrom your title to your lead sentence this was a very grabbing article. The article covering a topic so close to home with quotes from three different students made it a very enjoyable article to read. -Adrianna Streeter
Deletethis article is the truth and i relate the most with this article.
DeleteThis is a very good article. It speaks to a topic that not only seniors can relate to, but almost every student can. The quotes are well spoken and convey a meaningful message.
DeleteThis article is really well written and I really related to it. One thing I might change if I were you is the header of the article. Maybe instead of
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Wreak Havoc on High School Students
you could put the havoc part into the primary header instead of the secondary. This way the primary header includes the position you will be taking in the article in addition to what its about.
Your article hits very close to home for myself and probably many other seniors. Your title and opening grabbed my attention, and then the rest of the article kept it. College applications have been very stressful for myself and I can easily relate to your article. -James Streeter
DeleteThis article is covering the reality of most seniors, feeling as if they don't have the push at home and that if we didn't have school we most likely wouldn't get the common apps done. I completely agree with this article.
DeleteWhy That Tattoo?
ReplyDeleteBy Chyna Collins
Many people have tattoos and the ages range from very young to very old. But what is the reasoning behind why they get these tattoos and why they get them where they do on their body. Explanations are many: remembrance, decoration, and even impulsivity. Could it be in remembrance of a family member or friend? Or something that means something to you very personally. The answers are infinite as ones imagination!
According to a study conducted by a student at School Of The Arts, They asked a couple of people why they got the tattoos that they did and the answers were mostly around the same logic or ideas. The reasoning’s behind getting these tattoos were being in remembrance of someone, something they saw that looked good and they wanted it on their body, or something personal that was very special to them. Keeping in mind this is only a select few of people that I personally know, there could be many more reasons for many other people.
Many of them had very interesting tattoos. A lot of tattoos that the people had were of flowers, names of people, quotes, animals, and Dates or personal things that are important to them. This showed that many people get tattoos of days they want to remember or people that they love. The other half was of art pieces of stuff that the people thought were very creative and wanted on their body as decoration.
Then another question was raised from this study. Why do you get the tattoo where you do on your body? There wasn’t too many explanations that were different, although someone stated, “I wanted it to be sort of hidden because I didn’t want it to interfere with getting a job.” Other reasons ranged from “I wanted it on my arm so I can start a sleeve”, or “I wanted it somewhere that wouldn’t be too painful.” The study revealed that there are logical reasons why people get tattoos where they do.
The last question that was asked was what age were you when you got your first tattoos. Many people were young in their teens to around 25. Older people that were surveyed did not recently receive tattoos.
I really like this article, it is very informative. I like the topic you picked because many young people are age have tattoos or plan on getting them in the near future. The information stated I have heard before. Which tells me you did the research.
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Delete"Love your article! I also like the fact that you did a survey because you've gained personal experience.
I feel they should lower the tattoo age to 16 because I feel at that age you should be able to get one if you want. also I want one sooooooo bad!!!!!
DeleteThis is a somewhat true piece because the facts about many not have meaning behind there tattoos, but chyna why do you do your hair the way you do? it is a look your Are gong for.
DeleteInteresting topic that caught my attention. The story was informative and allowed the readers to get a little bit of insight into the minds of those who get tattoos.
DeleteVery different choice of topic, Chyna. I really like your article. The fact that you took the time to conduct a survey as well was really interesting!
Deleteyou thought out of the box good job girl
DeleteI love your topic choice. Mostly because I have a thing for tattoos and want a bunch already. I liked how you had many questions and answered them effectively.
DeleteSenior year, Exciting
ReplyDeleteOr Disaster?
By Clifton Green
Seniors at the School of the Arts took a survey that asked how they felt about their senior year when they were mid-way through. Of the 1200 total students, 180 of them were seniors. The responses that most of the students gave would surprise you. The students believe that the amount of money to enter colleges to be lowered so that it is more affordable.
More than 80% of the students answered that “It’s probably the most stressful things that I have endured so far.” According to the students there was more to worry about then there was to enjoy, especially when it started at the very beginning of the year.
“Senior year is like winter, it looks like a wonderful sight at first, before it even gets there… but when it finally comes, it just hits you unexpected like a storm. But the only difference is that it lasts for 10 months, versus winter lasting just 3 months.” One of the students said. “Others didn’t bother to explain why they were having a stressful senior year so, finding a student that would answer all of our questions” reporter John Maryland stated, “But fortunately we were able to find a few.”
Students listed the following reasons to why they are stressed: financial struggles; working; procrastination; family situations; fear of failure; fear of moving on (in a case in which the student has to go to a college that is not within the reach of their family and loved ones.)
“It’s just too much to worry about, I thought walking into school this year would be different.” Robert said he thought as he packed his things and left the classroom before any more questions could be asked.
Many students testified that colleges and state governments should raise income for the lower class along with lowering the yearly pay for colleges so that it could be more in the range of people who can afford it, which according to those students, is one of the main problems when going from high school senior year to college freshman.
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DeleteI'm sure everyone can relate to this! Good job with accurately portraying the stresses of senior year. Be careful of what you quote. Try not to give a quote out of thin air; quote a specific reliable source! There are many students you can choose to quote from. Also, throughout the story, you have a lot of run on sentences; try to divide them into smaller sentences.
DeleteI think you didn't need to use so many quotes but it did help to provide insight into the different ways people think. This quote is very true however, "financial struggles; working; procrastination; family situations; fear of failure; fear of moving on."
DeleteNicholas Walker
This was a good article over all, maybe revise your lead however. The quotes were interesting and offered new insight to the reality of senior year.
Delete-Mitchell Duncan
I agree with your article. I like that it shows the stress and how much of it we are enduring. Some people are so stressed about this year they won' even speak about it meaning that would even make it more stressful or that even that would make it worse and make them stress out more.
DeleteVery relatabe topic for this class and also very relatabe in which it draws attention from the whole senior class.
DeleteThe quotes are great as well and it is realistic.
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ReplyDeleteI believe that this has potential but.. It doesn't really follow the assignment. :/
DeleteTechnology Killing Humanity
ReplyDeleteBy Michele Wright
Technology has been a big part of life since the beginning of its time. Today technology seems to be control our priorities. Why is this? Is it because of how must we can do with it or because we are forgetting the importance of physical interactions with others? The answer is not quite simply.
To help understand how technology is really playing a role in daily routines selected seniors attending School of the Arts were asked a series of questions about the matter. Of the seniors being interviewed, smartphones are the best. The reason given was because you can do so much on the phone. Music, games, take photographs or videos, you name it you can do it with just as simply as a touch on your phone.
Mainly, these seniors are more focused on social media. Facebook, Twitter, and Instragram are the most important ones in their lives. As of what observed social media is the gateway from them to keep up on what is going on with friends and giving them the hottest trends. On an average the seniors are on social media about 80 percent of the time, about 90 percent of the time they are listening to music, about 100 percent of the time they are texting someone. This is just the power of smartphones.
These seniors spend more time watching television shows after school, work, or practice than doing homework or chores. Most seniors don’t even complete their homework or chores because they are too busy watching the latest episode of the hottest show. If the show is so important then they need a reality check because those seniors that are not completely the necessary assignments are the ones that want to be something big in the future, but that will not happen if they cannot identify what is more important.
Game systems are a problem especially with the male population. More males play video games than females. Yes video games can be great mind simulators with the strategy behind it and could also be informative if it has the correct background knowledge. It seems though that the types of game seniors are playing are sport games, but do you see those students putting the effort to play the games outside of the game, not really. Popular sporting games are Madden (football) and 2K (basketball). These are games are popular in real life too. You will see some seniors actually taking the game to the court or field, but the effort to play lacks the energy needed.
Seniors need to check how their senior year is being lived because this is the last year that they will be considered a child. Once they cross the stage and receive their high school diploma they are an adult and cannot live their life on the constant use of electronics. Staying on your smartphone or being glued to the video game or television will not get you to where you want to be. You need to put in the work; nothing will be handed to you on a silver platter. You are not royalty; you are just another person in the world unless you change that. Seniors, walk away from your, video game, television and take the first step of making your life more productive.
Like this article because its something I can relate to. I'll actually go home every monday night and watch an episode of Love and Hip Hop instead of doing homework because I think I can complete in my next day of study hall.
DeleteI agree with majority of your thesis statements however i don't think that a lot of the seniors come home after school and watch television. I think majority of seniors have one specific show they watch "Empire" or "Love & Hip Hop " for example however those are just two days of the week. I think it's more of a common occurrence for us teenagers to come home and be in our rooms either watching movies on Netflix or on social media.
DeleteI like this article because it is easy to relate to. I agree with both Kalvon and Aleah. I do brush my homework to the side and watch Netflix instead because I feel as though can complete my homework the next day.
DeleteI agree with this article a lot. It speaks to that procrastination instinct that plagues many students. Although, I doubt television is all that major in what people spend their time on when they come home from school.
DeleteHilary Clinton Narrowly Wins Student Mock Election Poll
ReplyDeleteBy Ann Schrader
In a survey created by students in Mr. Wilson’s government class meant to simulate the 2016 presidential election, Hilary Clinton narrowly won against Socialist Bernie Sanders.
The group found that Hilary Clinton won 33.1% of the vote, with Bernie Sanders in a close second with 31.8%. The combined votes given to the seven Republicans on the poll equaled about 15% and 20.7% of people either chose two candidates or failed to choose any.
The poll consisted of five questions asking about the voter’s gender, grade level, their political knowledge on a scale from one to five, their political party identification, and their choice for President from the current candidates. The poll presented candidates in two columns, Democrats and Republicans, and there was space for students to explain their choices.
According to Spencer Ressel, one of the group’s members, “18 people cited ‘Female Candidate’ as a reason for selecting their choice, but not a single one of the 18 votes went to Carly Fiorina. Hillary Clinton won all 18 of them.”
Students responded with an average of 2.68 when asked to rate their political knowledge and only 38% identified as Democrats and 2% as Republicans. 60% identified as either Independent or failed to specify.
The group gave polls to 154 students in seven social studies classes among whom 66% were juniors, 17 % were sophomores, 12% were freshmen, and less than 1% were seniors. Female students outnumbered male students almost 2 to 1.
When asked what they could improve about their survey, the group said, “The language may have been too vague, leading around 13% of respondents to select more than one candidate.”
The poll’s creators, Austin Hammond, Spencer Ressel, Ann Schrader and Adrianna Streeter presented their results to their AP Government class on Monday, November 30th.
Good lead, straight to the facts. I truly enjoyed the comparison between Clinton and Fiorina, “18 people cited ‘Female Candidate’ as a reason for selecting their choice, but not a single one of the 18 votes went to Carly Fiorina. Hillary Clinton won all 18 of them.”
DeleteNicholas Walker
I liked this article and find the results very interesting. The result summary is very easy to understand and I think that the lead was very good. 10 outta 10 fam.
Delete-Mitchell Duncan
I really enjoyed your article, it was enjoyable to read and got right to the point. Adding the questions right into the article and continuing with the results left me with no questions about the survey after reading just the first three paragraphs. -Adrianna Streeter
DeleteI like how the lead was straightforward. I also found the comparison in results between Clinton and Fiorina amusing. You gave plenty of quotes and statements without drowning the story in information; great job!
DeleteI enjoy that the article is straight to the point and gives details on what was asked within the survey. Although i believe that the lead didn't draw me in as well as it could have, it was otherwise a very well written article. - James Streeter
DeleteFighting For Recognition
ReplyDeleteOvershadowed Sports Eager for Equality
By: Aleah Adams
Amidst the winter season our minds are constantly clouded by the Superbowl and NBA finals, or even by the local Section V Basketball sectionals held at Blue Cross Arena. Therefore, other varsity sports competing in that seasonal bracket such as cheerleading, swimming and bowling are deemed unimportant or even inferior.
Brittnee Johnson, senior at local School of the Arts (SOTA), has been a member and captain of the Girls Varsity Bowling team for the past three years. Her pronounced leadership has been proven through her membership as the only girl on the Boys Varsity team and through her transformation of the SOTA Bowling reputation last season, due to her skill in leading the Girls team to Sectional victory.
Even with all of her accomplishments, Johnson has received little acclaim or recognition. “It hurts…I don’t feel like an athlete in this school,” she said when asked about her lack of equal athletic representation. Varsity Bowling, along with Swimming, fails to be praised over the morning announcements broadcasted every day; meanwhile, Indoor Track and Basketball highlights are glorified following a victory, or successful track meet.
The annual SOTA Sports Banquet, an event to uplift and celebrate the performances by all athletics between the September and May months, doesn’t appreciate or incorporate Varsity Swimming or Bowling. The slideshow of action shots and victorious team photos is consistently filled with Varsity Softball, Soccer, Basketball, Indoor/Outdoor Track and Baseball, whereas Swimming and Bowling don’t ever seem to make the cut.
And if an absence of acknowledgment isn’t enough, the lack of support from School of the Arts own Athletic Director, David Michelsen is the icing on the cake. Trophies won by Varsity Cheerleading, Bowling and Swimming are all concelaed in either his office or the main school office, where almost no one can admire them. Meanwhile Basketball, Softball, etc. trophies have been placed in our newly crafted trophy case juxtaposed to the gymnasium.
While Brittnee Johnson has been battling this issue for a long time, her hard work has not gone completely unnoticed. Currently she has sixty thousand dollars in scholarships for bowling and hopes to continue playing in college.
Johnson is not the only student in her school dealing with unequal sport representation, but with time all involved students hope for change and a better portrayal of their team.
I agree that most sports and athletes do not receive the recognition they deserve but I guess it should be taken into account that listeners might not have the patience to listen to everything, especially since they might believe sports such as bowling and swimming are irrelevant. I wish the cross country team would get some shoutouts but the season is over so...
DeleteNicholas Walker
I agree that SOTA only appreciates its varsity basketball team, the girls varsity softball just got its recognition two years, AD of SOTA, David Michelsen just recently updated the sports banners after asking for that to be done for three years.
DeleteLove it! You hit all the key points on how I felt about everything and being an "athlete" in this school. You talked about all the issues that both varsity swimming and bowling deal with and how we struggle to get recognized as a true varsity sport.
DeleteI agree with this article. The boy's varsity basketball team does seem to receive all the recognition. Extremely unfair..all sports should be treated equal.
DeleteAlenna Streeter
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Journalism
6 December 2015
Virtual Classes Challenge Excelling Students
Students at School Of The Arts are challenged by new high school online courses. Since first being offered at SOTA in 2012, virtual AP and Initial Credit Courses have been available to Juniors and Seniors who are on track for graduation and are willing to challenge themselves.
Some of the courses offered include AP Computer Science, AP English Literature, AP Statistics, and American Sign Language.
Virtual courses are not necessarily easy. Spencer Ressel, enrolled in AP Computer Science, said “[Virtual classes] require a lot of self-motivation,” but added that “It is nice that you get to work at your own pace”. Spencer also enjoyed typing his assignments and sending them electronically, which is “much better than writing them out,” but others like Jacob Gilbert-Mahoney disagree, saying they would “rather write out math equations by hand” instead of being required to use “annoying… document equation formats”.
The work load is heavy, and it can be easy to let assignments accumulate and fall behind. Students report that most work is done at home after school on a personal computer, rather than during the block of computer lab time set aside for them. The work can take upwards of an hour a day to complete, depending on the class.
AP credits are valuable assets to college bound students, and virtual classes are an accessible way to familiarize one’s self with the college format.
I think it would be good to add that there are teachers that come in and provide help periodically through the week.
DeleteThe sign language teacher never comes.
This was short, sweet and well organized. Good use of the inverted pyramid, with background information near the end.
DeleteI agree with what is stated in this article. These classes require focus and "self-motivation" in every aspect. This is well organized and the topic is clear.
DeleteI agree with all of your points. It got straight to the point with no "fluff"
DeleteGood opening. Nice inclusion of two different perspectives. Maybe in the last paragraph say "The students constantly reiterate how heavy the work load is" so it doesn't seem biased with just "The work load is heavy..."
DeleteNicholas Walker
I liked the lead and the fact that you incorporated two different views on the topic. It was short and concise. Nicely done.
Delete-Mitchell Duncan
I really enjoyed this article. I feel that this topic is very relevant and, to someone who takes virtual AP courses, extremely relatable. Your use of quotations was great because they were informative and funny at the same time. - Samantha Symes
Deleteyour article was short simple and got to the point i liked it a lot
DeleteI like your article a lot, I can relate to it since i take AP Stats. This, actually, motivates me to work more on my class at home than just in the period given to me.
DeleteBehind The Scenes: Dance Concert 2016
ReplyDeleteBy Aurion Powell
Dance Concert is one of School of the Arts annual performance art productions. Those involved in Dance Concert dedicatedly choreograph and rehearse from the end of October to the end the February to provide the best show for the amazing audiences.
The school year before the dance teachers choose dance students they feel are responsible and will be able to provide a well-choreographed sequence of symbolic human movement. Those students audition their work the following school year and the teachers then choose the pieces that will be involved in the concert. Auditions are a two week process. Rehearsals begin the last week in October and students involved are given a packet of “Dance Concert Rules and Responsibilities”. “The most important rule we have is to maintain at least a B average in all dance classes,” says Jonathan Hancock, a junior dance major involved in Dance Concert 2016. In consequence to not maintaining a B average, dancers are dropped from the concert. Depending on how many dance pieces you are performing in you could be rehearsing every day after school. The choreography is taught by the choreographers who take into consideration of the different dancers they have. Some people learn through watching a demonstration, others by listening, and still others by doing. Learning choreography can be difficult for some people because no one person dances the same. Teachers and student choreographers may end up changing part of the dance they made up to fit the dancers performing. “Learning and placing new choreography on the dancers while also setting spacing, formations and patterns is not easy” said one of SOTA’s senior student choreographers. After February break the dance schedules change for the dancers. Rehearsing until nine o’clock through the week. Sometimes even giving up your Saturdays to practice on the Main Stage. This can be exhausting, time consuming and hard on your body. Yet for SOTA dance majors performing the first weekend in March it is much more. “Dance is a very influential and important aspect of my life,” says Shaquasia Constantine, a senior dance major at School of the Arts. She continued saying, “The choreography makes me feel alive and the adrenaline is amazing.” This way for dancers to tell a story without having to say anything verbally. The movements of the dancers show their physical strength, technical ability and many emotions.
Every year the Main Stage is filled with positive energy. The Dance faculty and students create a weekend of unforgettable choreography with powerful meaning and beautiful music.
I been to the dance concert every year while attending school of the arts and every year it is a great show to watch. I am also supportive of keeping the grades high while doing this because education is the key to success.
DeleteHeader grabbed my attention. possibly a longer lead sentence. Great content and Quotes that captured different aspects of Dance Concert. Paragraphs seemed to ramble maybe separate to keep the reader interested.
DeleteI really liked this article. I agree with Caz, the header grabbed my attention. Being a dance concert participant, I am able to relate to this article and it's truthfulness.
Deletethis article is really interesting and it gives a different view
DeleteI like this article because it really shows that dance concert is a lot of work and it gave me more of an understanding on why the concert is such a big deal every year.
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ReplyDeleteBaby Deer Causes Two Hour Traffic Delay On Downtown Inter-loop
ReplyDeleteBy Caroline Smith
Downtown Rochester came to a halt for many drivers as a wild baby deer was loose on the inter-loop yesterday evening, causing a two hour traffic delay. The situation was safely resolved with the help from five police officers, nine firefighters, and a blockade created by animal control.
Officials reported the deer first appeared running back and forth frantically on the inter-loop around 5 p.m.
City Hall project manager Henry Fitts claimed that he was the first to stumble upon the energetic animal. “I was lucky enough to have slammed on my brakes in time,” Fitts stated, in a worried tone. “If I didn’t any sooner, I probably would have killed her.”
Fitts said vehicles who were approaching followed suit, and luckily saw the problem in time to slow to a stop. He remained calm in his car and phoned local police and animal control, who were quick to respond.
Officer Andrew Dale was the first to arrive to the unusual scene. “I couldn’t believe it!” Dale exclaimed. “I was in curiosity of why this deer was running wild, and how exactly it got here.”
Firefighter David Beckham showed up to the scene shortly after Dale. He was seen in an attempt to call the deer, to see if the she would respond. “It’s not every day that you see a young animal running amok downtown,” Beckham chuckled, adding, ”I never imagined myself responding to such a cute emergency.”
Animal Control arrived half an hour after Beckham, quickly sedating the deer and taking her into custody. ”We all were just standing there, wondering what in the heck we could do to get her to at least calm down for the time being,” Dale said. "This is one of the most unusual things we've responded to in a while."
Evening downtown traffic continued to proceed afterwards, giving drivers relief and perhaps a story to bring home.
This was a really enjoyable article to read! I was completely unaware this had happened in the city. The only question I had was what day did this happen exactly? The article reads yesterday but doesn't clarify what day yesterday was. -Adrianna Streeter
DeleteAwesome lead and organization! I'm glad the deer was ok. I'm curious about how you did research on this incident since most of us did stuff about school. Newspaper? Online? Personal acquaintance?
DeleteI love how your article is organized! You have a great lead, you have lots of detail that is very informative and it all is straightforward and surrounds all around the event.
DeleteI found this article to be very amusing. I don't think that this actually happened because you know.. Rochester. But there was a balanced quality of details and quotes. I too would like to know when "yesterday evening" was.
DeleteI loved this article! I had a great time reading it and I didn't even know this had happened. Your organization was great and awesome balance between details and quotes.
DeleteSenior Events - the Administrative Calendar
ReplyDeleteBy Spencer Ressel, Journalism
Senior Exit Interviews are the latest in a series of events organized by the administration based around senior year. Events while important , that have been planned and executed poorly, according to many students.
Other such events include yearbook pages, senior apparel, the senior trip, graduation slides, and cap & gown payments. These are just the beginning of a year full of events that the school’s administration has planned in order to prepare students for graduation, and life after high school.
This, however, makes life difficult for students who are already stressed enough about college and scholarship applications. In addition, several significant deadlines have been completely moved and replaced. One senior agreed to voice his opinions, claiming the deadlines were “Poorly advertised and unreasonable”, as well as being “...too early on in the school year”.
Compared to previous years, the deadlines for senior pages, cap & gown money, and senior apparel all occurred extremely early on. While previous seniors complete their yearbook pages and bring in payment as late as March or April, this year the hard deadline occurred on November 2nd, with no extensions. That is almost 6 months difference!
This only creates problems for students who are struggling to write college essays, go on tours, and complete all of their scheduled school work, which for many students is more demanding than ever before.
Organization is another notorious issue this year, as can be seen through Senior Exit Interviews. Notably, the interviews were conducted after school unlike previous years. Students were required to skip all after school activities, including meets and practice, show rehearsals, and work to attend the interviews, prerequisites for graduation.
When taken on the whole, these changes seem unnecessary and contribute to a more negative school environment. They cause stress and deter students from participating in their senior year.
I agree with how stressful senior year is with all of the deadlines, however as School President I've been ridiculed for not "displaying" the deadlines for people enough and that isn't the most fair. As we were all given the yellow paper with all of the deadlines listed on it, i believe that as seniors we should be able to keep track of deadlines and not have to be constantly reminded. That's how college will be for many of us next year and I feel this year should be good practice of that.
DeleteI really liked the topic that you chose. I feel that you could have created a lead that would draw the reader in more. You could have incorporated more quotations and maybe a name for the source. However, as I said before, the topic of the article really grabbed my attention and was very interesting.
DeleteYes i concur to such a high echelon. The way you describe the current system is so eloquently presented. I feel as if it accurately represents a a portion of my article.
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ReplyDeleteOpening Day For Deer Hunting Excites Western New York Outdoorsman
ReplyDeleteAs Opening Day Approaches
By: Weston Costello
Hunters all across Western New York prepare for what some call “ the best day of the year”.
As hunters get ready for this day to come many are not only excited but they are checking guns, trees stands and 4-wheelers to make sure everything is safe to use.
All over the country not only in New York are thousands of hunting accidents that happen each year. Gary Wright explained he is not worried about a weapon malfunction but trespassers “ I will never forget 2014 opening day, I was shot at on my property”. Wright continued to explain some hunters need to take things like trespassing on someone's property more seriously. “Didn't the hunting safety courses teach you that?” He stated. He took further action to make sure all posted signs and property lines were known with all surrounding neighbors to insure his safety.
As hunters are pulling deer after deer out of their property's the Department of Environmental Conservation (DEC) may be watching you. The DEC silently waiting for someone to do something wrong or sometimes even see if the person needs help. DEC officers have the right to check your guns and ammo to make sure correct rounds are being used to ethically kill deer but on occasion with warrant, they are allowed to enter your house.
Uncle Charlie's deer processing in Webster NY where many people say “he's the best around no doubt”. DEC officers checking hunters making sure they have tagged the deer they have taken and correctly measuring buck antlers for correct scoring. Casey stated “It is normal this time of year to have a visit”.
As hunters take on the rest of the season many hoping they don't become a statistic as a victim of a hunting accident.
I am very interested in your article as you know my family is very big in hunting, but have never been told of any experience such as this.
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SOTA BOYS STARTS IT UP BACK AGAIN
ReplyDeleteBy Christian Simmons
As everybody knows the SOTA silver hawks had a great season last year ending their 20- 3, winning the east ridge tip-off tournament, the gananda Christmas tournament and wining a sectional championship. The last time the school of the arts won a sectional championship was 12 years ago.
Since last year the silver hawks lost 6 seniors and 3 starters the only returing players to this new team were the 7th man Damare hanks starter James Clarke and starter and returning team captain Christian Simmons
Since the silver hawks has started a whole new road with a totally new team the decided to enter a summer league and fall league to get them ready for the new up and coming season. During their time in summer league the silver hawks ended with a decent record of 5-5 no how the old SOTA is known for but it was a new rebuilding process and it was going to take time and hard work to get back how they were before. In summer league loosing 5 games made them have a eality check, coming from last year loosing only 3 games out of 23 then coming to the summer loosing 5 games out of 10 it made the SOTA boys basketball team strive to be better. Now in fall league it was a different story I’m guessing the SOTA team had that self-reality check and the boys ended their fall season with the best record at 8-1, the boys were satisfied but they knew their real reason started November 24.
We talked to senior captain guard James Clarke about how he felt about the up and coming season and he told us “he believes that’s the team will be ready and with hard work we can make it back into the blue cross area”. We also talked to the head coach Al Nash and he told us “we are going to be deeper and way more athletic than our last year team and our new focus is going to be wining states”.
The SOTA boys will be ready, so come out to 33 school at 6pm on November 24th and watch as your defending class A2 champs the SOTA silver hawks take on the Bloomfield bombers. GO SILVERHAWKS!!!
An engaging article to read even though I'm not that into sports (Kalvon H-M)
DeleteI love this article and I am very supportive of SOTA's Basketball team. You guys are working very hard, keep doing what you are doing.
DeleteGood header and lead sentence. Many grammatical errors. However the content was for the most part well done. Could've been more paragraphs, seemed to run on.
DeleteOverall this is a very good article. It provides lots of details and statistics. The only thing that I see problematic is that you didn't arrange the quotation right and the grammar. “he believes that’s the team will be ready and with hard work we can make it back into the blue cross area”. Other than that good job bro.
DeleteCliques Divide People
ReplyDeleteBy Brittnee Johnson
You might ask yourself, how do we know if we are a part of a clique? Cliques are something that every human is a part of whether if they know it or not.
The SOTA senior class is filled with different people and a variety of cliques. By having majors, it separates us in several ways somewhat forces us to stay within our majors. Within these cliques, you have majors that think they are better than everyone else and try to stick together. Some draw away from their majors but others however, stick to the people that are just like themselves. These cliques formed when we entered the school as seventh graders and has developed over time. We as humans are drawn to the people that tend to have the same interest or talents as us, almost like an identical twin.
Teenage years are the years that cliques form the most and when life begins. Everything about cliques describes a teenager and how they live their lives. They tend to form their ideal group of friends and the people that they have the most in common with. Most of the cliques at SOTA are made up by majors and how they think they are in their heads. Each major is a clique within it and then branches within that clique or major.
So these cliques make everyone up and help teenagers see what the real world is like. These cliques never die, you will see them within the years but not as strong. They will never go away.
I agree that the majors separate a lot of people into cliques. Some people though are all around social people and talk to everyone and dont have a certain clique. I would say that most of my friends are vocal majors because they were the first people to accept me when i first came here and most of my classes are with them.
DeleteI agree completely! This year especially I've noticed cliques forming, especially with the choice of nine roommates for the Senior Trip to Camp Cory, and with all of the senior activities. I've tried my hardest to stray away from cliques however they naturally consume everyone sadly :(
DeleteI agree to an extent. I feel as if the majors at school of the arts are designed to give students a sense of security knowing that if they feel alone they have other people just like them in their major.
DeleteI also agree that majors separate people and that each major makes different "cliques". Even when I find myself trying to get away from the cliques I find myself always pulled back.
DeleteI agree with the other comments, the different majors at SOTA separate people and people seem to stick to the people they know in their major, their "clique," rather than branching out and becoming friends with other people in different majors.
DeleteWell written article that is relevant to high school readers. The only change I would make is switching the order of the second and first sentences.
DeleteFour-Piece Alternative Rock Band Bring New Sound to Music
ReplyDeleteBy Zoë Hodge
Hailed by critics as “The next greatest thing to happen to the alternative rock scene, X Ambassadors is a four-piece alternative rock band containing members Sam Harris, Casey Harris, Noah Feldshuh, and Adam Levin. Originally from a small town in New York, the members met at a New York college where they came together to escape the small town life. Lead singer Sam, says that songwriting for him, “became not only a way out of small-town life, but also a way for him to explore fertile themes of longing, jealousy, and personal pain.”
From 2009 to 2012, X Ambassadors worked on releasing an EP as they toured with bands such as LIGHTS. When their EP, Ambassadors EP, was released, they created a new song called, “Litost”, that would go on to be a part of the soundtrack for the movie, The Host. From 2014 to 2015, they toured as supporting acts for popular bands Imagine Dragons and Jimmy Eat World, to promote their upcoming Eps. After the band introduced their new single, The Jungle, they began to be featured on many television shows and films such as Teen Wolf, Orange is the New Black, and Pitch Perfect. In addition, X Ambassadors released their new album, VHS, in July 2015 as well as their latest music video for their new single, “Unsteady” which shows a couple struggling to cope with their relationship. According to lead singer, Sam Harris, the video shows a sense that “It feels like the promise was broken. There’s a fragility to that relationship.”
The band is currently on tour promoting their new album, VHS.
*Information taken from https://www.xambassadors.com/content/about
I like your lead, very good and it is great pickup on who they are and how well they are acknowledged. I also like how you set up your article in a chronological order, year after year. Good job!
DeleteSchool Of The Arts Students Discuss Their Senior Experience
ReplyDeleteBy: Shaquasia Constantine
School Of The Arts’ upcoming graduating class of 2016
reflect on their senior experience thus far. Larger than the previous class,
this year’s class has 187 students-- all with the intent of graduating on
June 24th of 2016.
Adjusting to senior year
Two students were interviewed who both gave similarities and differences.
Senior dance major, Aurion Powell, stated that her senior year has been
very expensive, tested many of her friendships and the application process
was extremely difficult. Kenijah Holloman-Wilson agreed with Aurion on the
price of senior year but disagreed on friendships and the college application process.
“..the application process has been decent and not much a hassle”.
Current state of mind
When asked “How are you feeling?”
regarding senior year overall. Aurion Powell expressed
the stress of the deadlines this year. “I think it is very hard
to remember all the deadline dates after one's that just passed”.
Aside from the negative, Aurion Powell also
shared some positivity “I am having so much fun enjoying the time
I have spent with friends and the faculty”.
Experience of senior year
Throughout the difficulties that have affected
the two seniors, they believe senior year has
brought them positivity and good change in
their life. Kenijah stated that “I feel confident
about completing it and how it is going so far.
It has taught me to be more organized and I
plan to finish as an honor roll student”.
Aurion said “So far, I feel that senior year has taught me alot.
I have learned who I am as a person. I feel that
this year has definitely shaped my focus.”
Like how the article was well organized and worded.(Kalvon H-M)
DeleteThis is well organized and worded. This is a great model of a News Story. I like how you included the quotes in every question stated. Great job!
DeleteLove the organization in this (sorry for being redundant) you really know what you're doing! Splitting your story up really made it engaging to read.
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ReplyDeleteTrue Theatrical Magic
ReplyDeleteBy: Emma Mryglod
The Theater Technology students and staff of School of The Arts are behind the scenes and constantly making magic happen.
Theater Technology students work on making the School of The Arts (SOTA) productions run, as well as other various School of The Arts activities. Tech majors build, conduct, and design the productions SOTA puts on. Many are unaware that SOTA Tech majors do all of the work themselves. Many of the people watching these productions do not know that Tech students are running the light, sound, and set operations as well as stage managing the entire show.
Students work for generally ninety plus hours a day learning the Theater Technology skills. Tech students create marvelous works of art. Students choose to be Tech majors because they love to build, and organize skillful projects.
Students often find themselves working in the shop in the basement, one of the three stages at SOTA as well as other unique places. Tech majors often walk 25-90 feet in the air working on hanging lights in the cove.
“Theater Technology has created a wonderful high school environment for me, it has helped me meet some of my closest friends, become skillful in contracting and theatrical work.” Says Jenna Hillabush, one of SOTA’S senior Theater Technology students.
Students participate in at least one SOTA production a year. This creates time management and a real life experience in the Theatrical field. Many students go on to pursue a higher education in Theater Technology.
I like your article because as a senior tech major we dont get enough credit for all the work we do, without tech majors none of SOTA's productions would be entertaining, what make a play or musical is the setting and colors where the actors perform. As tech majors we get taken for granted.
DeleteI think this news story gave great insight to Theater Tech majors because you guys are one of the forgotten majors however we rely on you guys for so much!
DeleteThis is a very great article that I am sure many theatre tech majors would be able to relate to. Because you guys do so much and walking around school I never hear of anyone talking about the theatre tech major although you're basically the support that shows like drama relies on.
DeleteI absolutely agree with you Emma and all the other commenters its true that we tech majors do not receive enough credit for all we have contributed.
DeleteThis is a really good article that's quick and to the point. It helps to give insight on just how little representation the Tech majors receive for such amazing visuals.
DeleteSome students of the class of 2016 find that their senior year isn't what they had expected.
ReplyDeleteBy Mina Ahumada
Many students entered senior year with the idea that they could get by with ease, and with little stress. Students were later sorely disappointed when they found the stress from college applications, school work, and outside activities was no better than the stress of previous years.
Faced with the ominous threat of college applications and acceptances, and for some an unclear future, students have a hard time not worrying during senior year. And for the group of students who participate in accelerated classes and extra circulars they face nearly double the stress, attempting to balance and maintain all aspects of their life in and out of school.
Casey Sheils, a student of Pittsford Sutherland high school who has applied to 9 colleges, takes a whopping 5 AP classes, and plays soccer says "I thought this year would be clear shot to graduation, but it has shown itself to be a dark winding path of disappointment and tears.”
Many students however still remain hopeful for a better stress free senior year after college applications and APs are over. Once these events that the year has placed so much stress on, students will then be allowed to relax and enjoy the time they have left at school with their fellow students and faculty.
Headline was a little long. Good lead sentence could've made it a little longer. Good use of vocabulary besides a couple grammatical mistakes. Very nice ending.
DeleteI agree with this 100%. Senior year has been the most stressful year for me and I don't even take a math or science!!!
DeleteLOVED Casey's quote. Very dramatic. Your title could have been a little more concise, but I feel that the topic is relevant and important. A few more quotations could have been used, but overall I really liked the article. - Samantha Symes
DeleteExchange program expands students horizons.
ReplyDeleteBy Jacob Gilbert-Mahoney
The foreign exchange program at School of the Arts has given incoming students a unique opportunity both academically and culturally. Students that have met and take classes alongside exchange students have told of the positive nature and friendly interactions that they share.
Each year, SOTA introduces a new group of foreign exchange students that participate in the school year. These students have been noted as contributing greatly to the classroom environment and social atmosphere.
Despite being newcomers, the students don’t at all seem to demonstrate any struggles to adapt to their new surroundings. “They haven't stood out too much for me other than being the new kids at school.” said one student. “They fit in quite well in my opinion.”
A number of local students have cited these exchange students as one of their primary reasons for being interested in the world abroad.
“Personally, foreign exchange students have allowed me to think about the drastic cultural changes between countries.” said another student. “They've also been very influential to me for being people that I only really get to see this one year of my life because they have such a limited time to be here.”
Mitchell Duncan, a Creative Writing major at SOTA student taking arts classes with his friend Mathilda Guizzardi, an exchange student from Italy, comments on how she and others have “helped” the learning process. “The give us new ways to see things and help us learn about new cultures. Also, their English skills are better than half of the school’s.” He states.
This intimate connection essentially bridges the initial gap that would otherwise result in awkward conversations or prolonged isolation. These encounters give local students a look at the world from beyond the classroom and at a different perspective.
This is a very well put together article, and the lead is informative. The foreign exchange program is very important. Nicely done fam.
Delete-Mitchell Duncan
very well said, I agree that with the exchange students we are partially emerged into other cultures and brought to our senses the differences and similarities between the US and other countries.
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ReplyDeleteMs. Parker
6 December 2015
SOTA’s Mary Poppins
Students of School of the Arts prepare for the opening of their winter musical production Mary Poppins. The cast has worked for weeks to bring this show to the stage.
Pressure, anxiety, and fear are felt backstage among the cast members. “Never had I known such pain and suffering until Mary Poppins” one of the leading actors said. The cast have needed to put a great amount of effort and focus to create a smooth performance.
The cast has bonded through the challenging rehearsals and long nights. Together they work toward a common goal, preparing for opening night. Achieving this goal has required cooperation between the students. Cooperation does not come easily, the students must put aside differences to create a strong sense of unity backstage.
Unity is vital to the creation of every show. The cast must feel comfortable performing and experimenting new techniques with each other. Once this unity has been accomplished, the beauty of stagecraft can begin.
“The magic, thirty kids working in unison with the ones on stage, making connections with each other even though they can’t see each other” the actor in the role Mary Poppins said. This magic is what keeps the cast working and gives them the motivation to put in extra hours when it truly matters. With the final rehearsals under way and opening night quickly approaching the cast needs to feel the magic now more than ever.
In these last few days the cast will have to use the unity and the magic that they created to accomplish a wonderful performance.
Love the quotes you used and the positivity you put forward despite the heavy stress you guys are under. Short and sweet.
DeleteAgreed every person I know involved in this show showed some type of stress while preparing the show, great article.
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ReplyDeleteBirnela Heganovic
Mrs.Parker
Journalism
06 December 2015
Is Body art destroying our youth?
By Birnela Heganovic
Body art can be seen all throughout history going as far back as the neolithic times, however in recent years tattoos and piercings have exploded into the new phenomenon, where everyone just has to have their own mark on their body. Some use body art as a form of expression, relief, comedy and many more personal reasons, while others feel pressured into morphing themselves to fit to societies new standards and trends.
If you walk into any high school in America today, you may almost immediately be able to spot out teenage students with several tattoos and piercings; You may even question, how was it possible for them to get these things done to their bodies? Aren't there age restrictions? How much did one pay? Was it done by a professional artist? How do the teens's parentsfeel about their new additons?
A Handful of Seniors from School Of the Art in Rochester Ny, were asked about their opinions on body art, the associated stereotypes that come along with tattoos and piercings and the reasons behind them. The majority of the seniors interviewed, believed that although there seems to be an obvious negative association with body art, the only person who should be concerned about it, is the person whose body it is going on. One student said " Tattoos and piercings on high schoolers are causing no harm to me, everyone is different; yes, i would love to have body art, however it depends on what it is and what the meaning behind it is, because it is a lifelong decision. I don't have anything, because I am not of age. In my opinion it does not create a negative stereotype for me, because i believe it is a way for high schoolers and people in general to express themselves. It doesn't make me prejudge people at all, everyone is different."Another student questioned believed that body art was only done to make people feel like they are "cool" the senior went on to say that " tattoos and piercings are just the new hype, everyone only is getting them because they want to be like everyone else, teenagers who get tattoos are just doing it because they in a way want their 'street cred', they want everyone else to view them in a different more powerful, tough kind of way". They were asked if they knew where minors were getting there body art performed, they said from local tattoo shops with parent approval or from a friend or someone who was willing to do tattoo or piercings under the table.
So is body art destroying our youth? well that depends on where your opinions lays on the matter.
I liked this article because I am somebody who wants to get body art in the future. Personally, I disagree with the person that said that people only get body art to look "cool." While this may be true for some people, I think the majority of people get tattoos because there is a meaning behind it. I also liked how you stay unbiased throughout the article.
DeleteI loved your news story because you show both sides of the youth both enjoying and hating body art. I think it brings more opinion to your story and shows how some people see things differently no matter the time era we are in and what seems acceptable.
DeleteI like your article, it speaks out for the people with meaning to get tattoos and for the youth that shouldn't be able to get tattoos. People need to restrict the rules on who can really get a tattoo.
DeleteI like how you include two in depth perspectives on body art. It is a very popular trend among adolescence and as it is "cool" to have tattoos and piercings, it can also be controversal, which you succeeded to elaborate on. Good job!
DeleteI love your article because it was so different and a topic that a lot of people wouldn't have chose to write about. It's very relevant because people with multiple tattoos and piercings are constantly prejudged by people, and i can't lie that i haven't prejudged people before.
DeleteI ABSOULUTLY LOVED YOUR ARTICLE!! It is so different and unique no one would normally think of something like this to write about. And your right there are so many opinions there is no right or wrong its all about preference.
DeleteBirnela this article is wonderful. When is was younger I often prejudged people with tattoos, until my sister, mother, and boyfriend got them. I never truly understood the significance other than its trendiness, and its personal meaning. I often think about tattoos I would like to get one day.
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ReplyDeleteA Fortress of Sound
ReplyDeleteby Jaymee Pride
Could you imagine being trained for war in downtown Rochester? Many students at SOTA pass the Main Street Armory on their way to school every morning and don’t have a clue about its past use; In passing they see an LED screen placed on the front lawn that advertises upcoming concerts and other events. In the early 1900’s however. armories were a fixture across America; an estimated 120 existed in New York State alone. Armories were controlled by the National Guard and used as training facilities. They served as defense and reinforcement to internal conflict after the American Civil War and used as back up during the era of the Gilded Age and labor protests. The Main Street Armory in particular was designed by a man named George L. Hines who occupied the office of state architect at the time of Main Street’s construction in 1905.
Everyone knows the second amendment goes as follows, “A well regulated Militia, being necessary to the security of a free State, the right of the people to keep and bear Arms, shall not be infringed." Armories had the purpose of training local militias when in the days when companies of citizen-soldiers were necessary for local defense, but now many have been abandoned and some repurposed. The Main Street Armory has experienced the former and the latter. The building lay dormant after being used for a variety of events in the mid 1900’s like traveling circuses, auto shows and it housed a diverse group of sports throughout the years. Soon after, it became neglected government property. It was purchased in 2005 by a local man by the name of Scott Donaldson for just $1,000. He invested in renovations for all the necessary repairs to the hundred year-old building and turned it into a large capacity concert venue.
I’ve personally attended a handful of shows at the venue and have had a great experience every time so far; most recently seeing a band from England called alt-J. I asked Keilani Graham who frequently attend events at the armory on her about her own experiences visiting the Armory. She said,“I absolutely love the armory. Good acts are booked. The security is always great, I feel safe whenever I’m there.”
Maybe on the next ride to school, a student or two will stop to consider what the Main Street Armory once was and what happened there before thinking of buying a ticket to their favorite act.
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DeleteI loved your news story! I had no idea what the Main Street Armory was before it was the concert venue even though my dad knows the owner. I feel that you were very informative and brought past and present aspects of the area to yours news story.
DeleteWow! I had no idea that the Main Street Armory was used as a training ground. The last time I was there was for a Bastille concert. As I think back to it, I try to picture people training for war in there. This was a really creative idea for an article! Great job!
DeleteYour article was very interesting Jaymee!! I have a interest in history about the past. And especially something that occurred here in Rochester.
Deletethis was a good topic and i never knew so much good things keep it up
DeleteThis article is very informative and includes history, present use, and factual evidence. Love the article and I often watch concerts at the Armory.
DeleteARE YOU TAKING SOTA FOR GRANTED?
ReplyDeleteBy Alan Johnson
“I thought it was going to be like High School Musical when I was in sixth grade. But now that I'm here I realized that is an absurd expectation to have of anything,” stated Luis Montano, a 12th grade vocal major at School of The Arts Rochester.
I’ve noticed a trend here at SOTA, the students here either hate it, are disappointed that it isn't like High School Musical, or a combination of both. Being a student that started attending the school in the eleventh grade, instead of the seventh or ninth like most students, I feel I have a rare appreciation for the school and its culture.
From eighth to tenth grade I attended University Preparatory Charter School for Men, and it had nowhere near the amount of resources and opportunities that SOTA has, personally I am a creative writing major at SOTA and at UPrep I couldn’t even get a single creative writing elective let alone a three course a year curriculum within it. So I would consider my transition into SOTA as culture shock, all of the sudden I had electives and AP classes. This was a freedom I wasn’t used too, but it grew on me and I love this school and all the good and bad it comes with.
But as time went on I noticed that some long time SOTA students do feel the same way I do. Throughout the last year and three months that I’ve been a student here I’ve heard things like “I’m so tired of SOTA,” “I hate this school,” and “I can’t wait to graduate,” and I never understood these feelings. When I asked Alenna Streeter, a twelfth grade instrumental major, if she thought some students were taking SOTA for granted she stated, “Absolutely!... there’s a lot of resources to be used, I don’t think anyone uses all of the resources that they are offered.” When I asked Tazmara Docter, a twelfth grade instrumental major she felt that, “some people just come here to come, [because] they don’t want to go to another public school.” Tazmara feels that some people take this school for granted, and so do I. It is easy to become complacent and unmindful with what we experience everyday, it is our job to understand and appreciate the gifts we bear. Academic, Artistic and Humanistic, not Heedless.
I completely agree with your article. I came to this school in eleventh grade from a charter school as well, and I know exactly what you mean about no creative writing elective. Also, I really liked your closing sentence.
DeleteI also came to this school later on , in the 10th grade and i had high expectations for what this school would be like. I wouldn't say it matched my expectations but it was pretty close. I really this school in the 10th and most of the 11th because it was so different from Aquinas and i liked the change and appreciated the arts because AQ didn't offer much of that kind of thing.
DeleteI agree with this article. Many students do take this school for granted. I have heard many of the same statements in the article. I think that if so many people don't like this school they should leave, they are taking up space for people who actually want to attend this school. So that they can better themselves in the future.
DeleteGood job! That Luis Montano guy sounds mighty handsome!
DeleteI agree with everything you said, many of our students do not understand just how lucky they are, and how many advantages and benefits they have just because they go to SOTA. Many other city schools cut art classes that we are so lucky to have, and we should appreciate these privileges.
DeleteThe article was missing a lead, but I still found it very interesting. As a student who has attended SOTA for almost 6 years, it's easy to lose the appreciation that I once had. I liked that you based the article around your opinion, but still managed to get quotations from other students who agreed with you.
DeleteYou should put a lead before your quote at the beginning, to introduce the topic and your position on the topic, instead of opening with just a quote. Other than that, strong article and well written with only a few grammar and punctuation errors.
DeleteReminder: no electronics in class
DeleteThis is your opportunity to complete the stories. The expectation is that everyone is focused on this work. If you have completed the story, you may work on material for another class or read a book. YOU MAY NOT EXPLORE VIDEOS OR PLAY GAMES ON THE COMPUTER.
New unit on Monday.
You have the next to days to work on your news stories. If you need to gather information, ask for a pass.
Remember that these are due by midnight Sunday, December 6
Very important: these are writing grades and will count in the 50 % category.
All stories should be posted on the blog for this date. If you send it to me, I will post it.
Be mindful that we are sharing these. Proof read!
Grading rubric: How does yours measure up?
Ace reporter
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Fair
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This story — so professional one would think it were cut from a professional news publication — convincingly demonstrates mastery of the inverted pyramid form by doing the following:
❍ with precision, arranges the key facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ relegates background information — information the writer could have known before the event — to a place below all new information
❍ is devoid of unattributed opinion
❍ artfully illustrates points with interesting, well-punctuated and well-attributed quotations; a transition is used to introduce each quotation.
❍ is a model of brevity, using few words to maximum effect.
❍ avoids passive voice except in the rare cases when it is merited
❍ shows few, if any, errors in the conventions of written English
This solid inverted pyramid story, while not as impressive as that written by the Ace Reporter, consistently does most or all of the following:
❍ arranges the key facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ generally relegates background information — information the writer could have known before the event — to a place below all new information
❍ is devoid of unattributed opinion
❍ illustrates points with interesting, well-punctuated and well-attributed quotations; a transition is used to introduce each quotation
❍ is for the most part concise
❍ generally avoids passive voice except in the rare cases when it is merited
❍ shows few, if any, errors in the conventions of written English.
This story suggests general awareness of the requirements for an inverted pyramid story, but does not suggest great prowess in meeting those requirements. This lead does much or all of the following:
❍ unconvincingly arranges the facts of the story from most important to least important
❍ in some cases, fails to keep background information in its place at the bottom of the story
❍ may include minor unattributed opinion
❍ sometimes illustrates points with quotations but may do so awkwardly and without adequate transitions or
❍ shows too little attention to the need for brevity
❍ may slip into passive voice
❍ shows some errors in the conventions of written English.
These story doesn’t meaningfully address the assignment. This lead does much or all of the following:
❍ either does not have all the basic facts or shows clear errors in organizing them from most to least important
❍ fails to keep background information in its place at the bottom of the story
❍ is bereft of meaningful, supportive quotations; may fail to introduce quotations at all
❍ includes significant unattributed opinion
❍ noticeable over-use of the passive voice
❍ is wordy
❍ shows multiple errors in the conventions of written English.
(Note: The fact that a person is speaking to students is not in and of itself newsworthy; stories should focus on what a person says, not the fact that he/she has spoken.)
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DeleteThe article is well written and very informative, but you use a significant amount of bias when conveying your message. Rather, you should refocus your style and write a much more meaningful piece that goes into the heart of the subject with those involved.
DeleteThis is a good story, and I appreciate the effort that you seemed to put into it. However, I believe the article is supposed to be both objective and not personal, whereas this is more of an editorial. I like it, but I'm not sure if this is correct.
DeleteI agree with this article completely! Many people come to SOTA just to come, solely because they feel like it'd be like High School Musical. Yes, I was one of those little kids in 7th grade who was disappointed that SOTA was not like High School Musical in the slightest bit, but while growing up, I've realized that SOTA has so many resources that "normal" schools don't have. I appreciate my time spent at SOTA, and how much it has helped me further my music career. Keep up the good work!
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ReplyDeleteMary Poppins Opening Night Pre-show Extravaganza!
By Luis Montano
Mary Poppins opens tonight at School of the Arts. The cast and crew along with the orchestra are excited and ready to put on a show. Tonights show will be brought to life by the wonderful people who put in the hard work and effort. Here are some of their feelings on the very first performance
Dylan Goodman (Crew):
Q: Are you excited?
A: Absolutely not
Q: Are you ready?
A: Not at all
Q: Are you nervous?
A: Yes, beyond terrified
Jose Colon, Bert (Cast):
Q: Are you excited?
A: Very excited! Ecstatic!
Q: Are you ready?
A: Very ready, I feel well prepared
Q: Are you nervous?
A: Of course, if I weren't, that'd signify apathy for what I do, which is not the case.
Q: Any grievances?
A: Dissatisfied with the lack of effort among some colleagues, otherwise, very happy with the show overall!
Alicia Bailey (Orchestra)
Q: Are you excited?
A: Of course! I've been waiting quite some time for this and am stoked
Q: Are you nervous?
A: Not particularly, I'm missing buttons on my shirt which is a little unsettling, but otherwise I'm great
Q: Are you ready?
A: Ready as heck! We've been rehearsing everyday!
Q:Any grievances?
A: I wish everyone knew their lines and key signatures and counting skills. Overall, the cast and orchestra need to be more in sync. Hopefully we can pull it together
There you have it! Good luck to you all on this production!
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DeleteHorrid. Quit writing you blubbering waste of a man
DeleteThis is less of an article and more of a collection of interview transcripts. Instead of writing it the way you did, you could have assembled it in paragraph form and included answers in a more fluid way. I did find the information interesting and relatable, though.
DeleteAnderson Cooper is that you? I can tell you have great vision and promise, I just wish there was more to read! Please next time give me more Senpai.
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ReplyDeleteBach Off!
By Allen Austin
In this generation, a lot of young audiences are not captivated by classical music. This here, has a lot to do with where classical stands today as a music genre today. Classical music is one of the least appreciated music genres today, since many young people are captivated by others genres. Such as Pop, R&B, Rap, Rock, and many others. As a result of this, classical music is going to keep declining in popularity in the future.
According to an article in Quora, there are many reasons as to why young audiences don't think that classical music is and never was "the genre of all genres". Many think that many of the songs are too long, meaning that they have a short attention span. "Believe it or not, a lot of classical music involves the same introduce-a-melody-early-and-repeat-it-every-so-often strategy. But heaven forbid you've gotta sit through a 45-minute symphony, or even a 15-minute piece for that gratification. In an age where more and more products are advertised as on-demand and faster, online shopping has taken over, and electronic communication has brought the world closer together, it's only natural that general attention span decreases.
Young audeinces also did not think that classical music is the best genre because it is distrubuted as much as other genres. Study shows that genres like Rock, Pop, EDM, R&B, Rap, and Country are some of the most popular genres today in music, along with an article that shows how often classical music is acknowledged, through album sales, radio, etc. "Let’s start by following the money. In 2013, total classical album sales actually rose by 5 percent, according to Nielsen. But that's hardly a robust recovery from the 21 percent decline the previous year. And consider the relative standing of classical music. Just 2.8 percent of albums sold in 2013 were categorized as classical. By comparison, rock took 35 percent; R&B 18 percent; soundtracks 4 percent. Only jazz, at 2.3 percent, is more incidental to the business of American music."
Still in the present, young audiences everywhere do not appreciate classical music. Are you one of them or are one who would want to learn about classical music or even promote it?
Your article enlightened me about the classical music. As a person who doesn't listen to classical music, I can relate to why people don't listen to classical music. I, however, really liked your title. I thought it was creative and funny.
DeleteReally good article. The statistics at the end allowed the interested readers to learn more about the topic, but allowed the readers who didn't finish the article to still receive the vital information. The quotes were critical to your article which gave your article credibility.
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ReplyDeleteHigh School Students Believe Senior Year Too Expensive
By Austin Hammond
The final year of high school too many seniors is thought to be too expensive. Almost all senior activities, including senior trips, cap and gown payments and others are by many seniors far to financially draining. “...a lot of the events are expensive, which isn't too terrible--since they're optional. But the high costs for mandatory things such as cap and gown are irritating” said Spencer Ressel, a senior at School of the Arts.
Many of the expenses such as senior apparel and senior trips are optional which gives the students the options to opt out if not financially secure. Some things however, are required to purchase and if not paid for on time can have serious consequences such as prevention from walking the stage at graduation.
Many lower income students believe that it is unfair that they have a reduced senior experience because of their financial situation “I believe it is a good amount of expensive” said Jon Le, salutatorian of his senior class. Because of the high workload that is senior year for many students, it is difficult to devote time to both school work and work.
Most of the senior activities do cost money and that can be attributed to a low budget. Student body government and Senior planning committee have about $7000 between them. $6000 of which is meant to be divided between all high school students. With large classes consisting of somewhere between 150-200 students, $1500 is simply not enough to fund a senior trip. In order to pay for all of the senior cap and gowns, for 2016s class it would cost just shy of $7000
I feel the schools should raise money for the seniors and give certain things away like hoodies, shirts, hats stuff like that as a gift for making it this far.
DeleteI think that your news story is good because you show a common complaint in the senior class here at SOTA. You also show the aspects of how some students are financially paying for things like trips, senior apparel, cap and gown and other things on their own and not through their parents.
DeleteYou have a valid point, but I'm always positive that there is more funding that could be provided. Though many things are optional, it still sucks.
DeleteI feel as if your story was well written. I however think that there may have been some bias feelings because of that fact that you happen to be the vice president for the student body board. Overall well written. Devon Slone
DeleteI like your story there should most definitely be more funding for senior events, because as our last year we all want to have and remember it for the best.
DeleteThis story can relate to many people, and it's great that you brought this problem to attention. There could have been a few more perspectives to quote, such as those who are financially capable enough to participate in all events and pay all costs. Nonetheless, good job!
DeleteRetweet. Amen. I agree. However, throughout the article you misuse "to" and "too" a few times, so just be careful of that. There are a few other grammatical errors too, although none of them detract from the overall understanding. Also, you should put quotes in a new paragraph at the beginning, unless they're partial quotes. Jon Le's quote is pretty great though.
DeleteI feel like nothing is that expensive, almost everything that seniors "have" to pay for is at a reasonable price and/or optional. Many of the seniors have jobs and some source of income, that over the course of the year should be able to fund for senior "necessities". Fundraisers should definitely happen to help lower the prices, because cheaper is always better, however students should be responsible for getting money to pay for things, because in life after high school, there are not going to be fundraisers to help pay ones bills.
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ReplyDeleteBy Jessie Wrona
The back stage story of the magical musical Mary Poppins in School of the Arts. Mary Poppins is one of the most beloved children’s book series and movie musicals of all time, featuring iconic performances by both Julie Andrews and Dick Van Dike. This beloved story has been transferred into a full Broadway performed musical, full of flashy dance numbers, tap dancing chimney sweeps, and fun new characters that help to reinvigorate this timeless story.
Wait Mary Poppins is a Musical?
Putting on such a large show in a high school has not been an easy task. With a cast of over sixty people with most of them being in middle school has posed challenges in preparation but hard work and perseverance from the whole company has been key. Rehearsals have been underway sense October for the actors and crew was integrated the week before opening night. Ariana Rivera explained that she “has always dreamed about being a part of Mary Poppins and that all the work is well worth the amount of magic that is made during the show”. The Christmas shows in School of the Arts largely support the upcoming shows within the year so pressure to sell tickets has been felt so it has been exciting to see so many your faces in the audience this first weekend, with hopes of having an even larger turnout for the second week of the shows run.
I liked this article because it gave a background of Mary Poppins, and then it goes into the production of the musical at SOTA. I especially liked your title because it is very creative.
DeleteI like how it gave a good descriptive of mary poppins and also how everything is ran by the production I soon have to see this!
DeleteNever really paid that much attention to how much work is put into theater productions because of my mind being so wrapped around Dance concert. Very informative.
DeleteI was very excited when i found out about Mary Poppins. Its a classic that many people know and love. Im a little upset i didn't try out because it would've been a great experience.I know you guys put a lot of work into this production and cant wait to see it!
DeleteI like this article a lot, but could have used a bit more about how tiring and draining this show truly has been.
Delete"With a cast of over sixty people with most of them being in middle school has posed challenges in preparation..." sound a bit awkward, and could probably have been reworded a bit to sound better. Also, you could have used a solid lead to hold the article together and it would have improved this significantly. Overall though, solid article. Well done.
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By Adrianna Streeter
Senior year for high school seniors is extremely stressful. From graduation requirements like exit interviews, complex college applications, to the more trivial worries like year book photos, senor pages and prom attire- a feeling of deep anxiety is buzzing through the senior class.
There has been controversy between the previous views of senior year, parents and teachers’ claiming it is the most relaxing year of high school were seniors can relax, to students now expressing the stress that has been accruing in the last three months.
Jessie Wrona, a senior at School of the Arts said: “Senior year is the first time you have to deal with stress all by yourself”. She chalks up the differentiated views to the inexperience of any senior in high school compared to an adult that has been through the stress already.
Graduation Requirements
Graduation requirements have been a big part of the stress stacking up against the senior class. Not completing requirements can lead some seniors not being eligible to walk the stage in June.
The entire senior class at School of the Arts was required to stay after school for senior exit interviews. During the week leading up the interviews teachers stressed general interview etiquette and proper dress, to specifics like a firm hand shake and how to sit in your seat to be a viable candidate.
Aleah Adams another senior at School of the Arts said: “They voiced it in class, told us to take it seriously, and stressed out appearance greatly!” Continuing to explain she’s been interviewed a few times before, but was still: “A little” stressed, but over all “Felt prepared” for her interview.
Compared to senior classman Brittnee Johnson, who voiced she was: “Somewhat” stressed, and: “Felt somewhat prepared” for her interview “but not totally ready”.
On the other hand, some students weren’t explained the reason behind senior exit interviews, many like Michael Gordon just said: “No”. When asked if he knew the reason for the interviews. Others like Allen Austin having only been told “It’s a graduation requirement”.
Thirty seven volunteers from the community where the people conducting the interviews, ranging from court judges to college admission officers, the only information the volunteers had about their interviewees where the college essays, cover letters, and resume- similarly to what colleges receive or a job recruiter.
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by Adrianna Streeter
Only one student that was questioned expressed that they were aware that some students could be offered actual jobs after completing their interview, a tidbit that might have added on some extra stress to even the most well prepared student, all others made no mention of this opportunity.
Aleah Adams said she: “It’s been noted that people get internships and jobs form these interviews”.
Balance
Balancing academics, deadlines, and extracurricular activities is a real source of stress for the senior class.
Sense the second week of school all seniors have had to deal with multiple dead lines; cap and gown order forms due, senior pictures being handed in, and cap and gown pictures, on top of passing all academic classes and having to fit in any and all extracurricular activities like sports or a job one might have throughout the year.
“Senior year so far is stressful and a lot to take in. Battling work, school and athletics is something that almost any senior deals with. Worrying about getting into your top school and deciding on what you would like to major in is completely stressful”. Brittnee Johnson, Captain of the Varsity bowling team and a senior at School of the Arts said.
Contrastingly, when asked about his stress level during his senior year Michael Gordon said: “There’s a lot of unnecessary stuff but it’s been good.”
Keeping up grades or succumbing to early to ‘senioritis’ is a struggle- to continue to work hard in all academic classes, or relax with the knowledge with doing the bare minimum a senior will still be able to graduate. Finding a balance between enjoying the year, and stressing about all academic classes is difficult.
Balancing between making sure one is enshrined via the craziest school prank or the best senior page, or working solely towards the future. Both tasks are time consuming and finding balance between the two extremes can be difficult.
Love the vocabulary used in this like "buzzing" and "accruing". Also you have so much content and it's all super interesting!
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This week at the School of the Arts it has been stressful for seniors. “We have been getting ready for senior exit interviews, trying to pick out the perfect outfit, and getting our profiles ready for the interviewers”, Shaquasia Constantine said. The question is how are they juggling between academics and their personal life?
Recently 3 students have been interviewed to explain their struggles. Miriah Dejesus, Angel Rodriguez, and Aurion Powell are all seniors at SOTA. They all have stated the same answer when reporter Kalvon Morrison asked, “When do you guys have time for friends”. They all said, “Hardly ever”. These three ladies are all in after school activities which require a lot of rehearsals and a lot of perfection. Dance Concert is one of SOTA’s largest productions. “Every year the Main Stage is filled with positive energy. The Dance faculty and students create a weekend of unforgettable choreography with powerful meaning and beautiful music”, says Mary Lee Miller (Modern Dance teacher at SOTA).
Throughout the difficulties that have affected these ladies they still feel like “the work has to be done” says Powell. Going to a school of fine arts seems pretty busy and also seems like an adjustment if you aren’t used to it. Long hours on stage and then trying to squeeze in that extra bit of time to do school work. Some say their senior year has shaped their focus and have gotten them to be more determined.
Headline caught my attention, but the lead sentence and quote seemed rushed. All quotes were good and I liked more than just the students had a quote. Also brought up some great points that people could connect with.
DeleteLove the article. It is short but straight to the point. The caption caught my attention. The quotes were great and filled with detail.
DeleteI agree with Aurion. I love your article. Very blunt and straight to the point. The quotes really helped make the article as well..
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Hate school lunch? Want to leave the building, go someplace else to eat? This dream is a reality to juniors and seniors at School of the Arts.
Juniors and seniors have been allowed to leave t=because they have been deemed mature enough. However it is a privilege and not a right and will be revoked if students do not make it back to school before their 42-minute lunch period is up. Due to that almost all of the students come back to school within reasonable times because they choose not to wander too far off as most students lack cars and therefore walk.
To juniors, leaving school is similar to taking in a breath of fresh air, figuratively and literally. Most were tired of being cramped in the school commons and were looking forward to leaving ever since they heard juniors and seniors were capable of doing so.
Many juniors wonder what to do with their newfound freedom. Most walk to and buy food from fast food places such as Wendy’s and some bring their own lunch to school in order to save money. Money is also an issue to those who buy food every day as juniors realize how taxing it can be to their budgets.
Juniors have commonly said, “Bruh it feels so good to leave”, “I can’t wait to go to Wendy’s fam, I’m hungry”, and “Yo screw the commons, I’m going out even if I don’t got money to eat.”
Seniors are more mature as most pack lunch to save money and for health reasons. Seniors have commonly said “Bruh I ain’t got no money, thank god I packed lunch though.” and “Wanna go somewhere other than Wendy’s and chill, fam?”
That demonstrates the transition of experiencing the freedom of leaving for lunch to juniors to using that privilege wisely with seniors.
Headline didn't really grab my attention. However the lead sentence made up for it. Paragraphs were separated nicely and good overall content. Possibly could've sited more on quotes instead of being so vague.-caz
DeleteNicholas, I feel as if the information expressed in your story was well said. I feel that the story could have had more evidence as to the reason why only juniors and seniors get the chance to leave for lunch. Overall good story. Devon Slone
DeleteWell fam, I liked that article. The points about seniors being more mature is very true, and I personally see this everyday. I believe that freshmen and sophomores aren't mature enough to deal with the responsibilities this includes.
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DeleteI kind of felt like you rode the fence a little bit. Like I thought you were going to say that lower classmen deserve the right, but then you switched gears so I don't know. It was good though.
DeleteOverall it is a a quality article and your points are well defended. I don't necessarily agree with the lead being a question.
DeleteThe message and information of the article is well conveyed and portrays a deep understanding of the subject. The headlines is a good attempt at attention grabbing, but is a bit cliche. Anyway, I really like your quotes fam.
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According to the NDDA, 98.9% of nursing homes have experienced cases of elderly abuse. This abuse does not have to be physical, it can be verbal or social abuse.
During a personal account at one nursing home, whose name is undisclosed, one volunteer experienced and noticed so many incidents that weren't okay, unacceptable ways for anyone to be treated. During the time at this nursing home, the volunteer took it upon herself to take note of what was going on and noticed that the elderly were being left alone, not checked on, not brought down to event, rushed to bed because workers were tired and many more other things. One person who wishes to be anonymous said, “ When my mother was here before she had passed away, I had to take every Saturday off of work because I knew how much she loved to play bingo. If I didn't come, I know she wouldn't be able to go because they don't bring her down.”
Another family member stated, “I put my mother out in front of their desk because if I put her in her room, she would be left in there without being checked on until they gave medicine the next morning. When I heard this, it just didn't settle well with me because they are human just like us and shouldn't be treated less than that just because they are older.”
Jessie, an elderly person living at the local facility, stated, “I like living here but sometimes they just leave me in my room if [a volunteer] doesn’t come get me.” Readers should be touched hearing about the role of volunteers because that makes all volunteers feel special, making them want to help out more because they know that they are getting senior citizens out more and keeping them moving, out and about and around their friends.
One elderly woman at Bingo evening, Norma, stated, “It’s like a living hell in here because I don’t like these people.” She is strong on how the people here treat her and is sad about feeling this way.
The purpose of this article is to raise awareness of how elderly citizens are being treated and how younger citizens should step out and up to get help and let the world know how the elderly are being treated. A volunteer at the local nursing home asserted, “People just sit around and watch it happening. Imagine if these individuals were your family members. You would want the best for them and I just want the world to know they need to speak up on how the elderly are being treated and make a difference in the nursing homes. I've witnessed for a long time and now enough is enough it's time to stand up for them and other elderly folks because they won't speak up for themselves.”
I like your news article because I feel that you show perspective not only from the people living there, the volunteers and even the people's family. This helps to show all around opinion and show how bad this really is.
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DeleteIt's heartbreaking how the elderly are being treated as anything less than human nowadays because they deserve everything and anything that everyone else has. Since the government cut down money being used to better nursing homes, the multiple kinds of abuse that goes on there just continue to be brushed away. Some people can't afford to keep their family in homes either so that makes things worse because if they can't rely on those facilities, what can they do? This article is amazing because it discusses an emotional topic that not everyone wants to talk about.
This is a very informative article and I like it a lot. There is real emotion exposed here and sheds light on an issue that is not looked over very often. It does its job at raising awareness very well.
DeleteA strong article with a unique perspective that most people are aware of to some level. Really great sources and well researched. You might want to consider changing the lead so the sentence begins with a noun. It would make the lead a little more direct. Great job!!
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Senior year has become synonymous with stress. There are a couple types of stress these teenagers are going through, whether it be home stress, school stress, health stress, financial stress, etc.
Health Stress
This is the kind of stress that teenagers are worried about, regarding their health, a family members, or a friends. “I’m kind of stressed about getting accepted into colleges because my grades aren’t up to par, like last year. And I’m just stressed about everything, like classwork and I’m not really focused because I’m worried about my grandma’s health.”- said Tazmara, a senior at SOTA.
School Stress
This type of stress is stress that seniors contract during the school year. The seniors were becoming stressed about college applications, and acceptance letters. As I found out, while interviewing Tazmara, she was particularly scared about not being accepted into college, because of her grades. Her grades were going down because she was scared for her grandmother’s health. I asked how the application process is going and the response I got was “Really easy, but I do need to still put some stuff in for one or two more colleges.” “Grades definitely, like attendance and petty stuff really. I feel like its stressful when other students are like acting up in class, and teachers are taking it out on you, and the whole class.” Said Lauren, a senior at SOTA.
Financial Stress
“I know I’m going to be paying loans back because I’m going to need financial aid.” Seniors are the most nervous about financially being able to afford college. Are you stressed about college financially in any way? “Well yeah, college is expensive. For example, parking as a freshman at college, it’s unfair and costs a lot. Also being a senior is expensive, cap & gown, trips, senior apparel, yearbook, etc.”
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DeleteI agree that senior year is very stressful! I also agree that not only school is something that is stressing many of us out these year. Its hard to deal with stress while trying to graduate and get good grades.
DeleteSaisha Delvalle
DeleteSenior year can be both extremely exciting and extremely nerve-racking. I like how this article points out different kinds of stress that students tend to go through and demonstrate different perspectives that shed light to them. It's nice how it's not just about high school either- even though we're not in college yet, we still stress about it.
this article is me and my every day so i appreciate it
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Eavesdropping
What happens behind the scenes to make all the magic on stage transpire? Many will come to find the underestimated jobs that the crew has done is what everyone depends on. There are several groups of people with specialized skills that create the shows environment.
Each individual theatrical crew member the success of the whole. Instructor Ken Canfield says they are “Creating a Masterpiece.” There are generally 7 groups that work back stage, the light, sound, Left wing and right wing of the stage, booth manager, and those who are in charge of props. These duty’s each contribute are for greater outcome and make much more of a contribution than one may notice. Do you get appreciation? Canfield was asked. “Yes, even though I am a shy person, which is why I Make my small contribution behind stage.”
Between Running the show, giving the cue in which a light must go on at an exact time, the job is something that many may not expect the measures these people must meet.” It gives great social interaction.” “It also lets me express my creative outlet” Canfield says about the overall job its, but he also expresses that it is “very hard work”.
Not just any one can do the job these people do, there are attributes and skills one must obtain to make the chaos of running a show a little more settled an organized. The personalities of the crew members Canfield emphasized “have a deep impact on the outcome of the whole show.” One must be adaptable, dependable and have a small sense of humor, but everything else comes” Canfield included. When meeting a director or actors wants and need, anything can change at any minute so the adaptability intertwines and if they can fulfill the needs, altercations show has is where the dependability attribute butts in. During rehearsals and show time there is tension, nerves and frustration in the air and the sense of humor gives helps the make the environment pleasant.
SHOW NIGHT! Directly from actors and crew members
“show night is nerve wrecking and a major relief”. Canfield last says the whole theater department gets to see their work built from the ground up under the lights and with a crowd.”
I feel that the crew members are so important to a show or play. They are very hard workers and know what they're doing. Giving cues and making sure things go right is a huge responsibility and they deserve a lot of appreciation.
DeleteVery informative and allows the reader to see things from another perspective, one of someone whom actually experiences and has to complete the work to the best of their ability.
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Saisha Delvalle
DeleteThe title caught my attention, it was creative and didn't spoil what the article was going to be about. It's crazy how there's so much that goes down backstage while people just sit and enjoy the show without knowing all of the hard work being put in. The crew members contribute a great amount to the whole show in general, and it's true that not just anyone can do those jobs.
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Ms. Parker
12/5/15
Having to measure up to an older sibling is told to be very frustrating to have to go through. To constantly be reminded of your older siblings successes every time you make a mistake in school or just life in general. Some adults think of it as a way to motivate the younger child to do better and to try harder but it breaks down character. In the book “will you still love me if I don't win” it speaks on the hard times that younger siblings have dealing with their parents comparing them to their older siblings and even vice versa. In a part of the book it states “... They are constantly reminded that they are not measuring up to the older brother or sister. ... It can also affect the younger sibling's commitment and motivation.” That quote speaks for itself and for other children who are going through the same situation. Brittnee Johnson is a senior at School of the Arts and she has an older sibling that she doesn’t only have to measure up to but overpass in certain ways. Brittnee’s sister had a baby at 20years old and went to MCC and dropped out, and I asked Brittnee why she has to measure up to her sister and she said “she had a child at a young age and dropped out of school and she set my parents standard for Me.” She also stated “It hurts because I have to be better than her and when I get her age I can’t make my own decisions because my sister made them for me and set my parents expectations for me. So when I get her age I can’t have a kid if I want to, I have to go and stay in college with no choice because of my sister’s choices.” This might have motivated her in some way to be better than her sister but it doesn’t give her the freedom of making her own options.
Dress Code Creating Animosity for Administration
ReplyDeleteStudents Believe Dress Code Unfair,
Hypocrytical, Shows Recent Survey
by Jacob Eckhaus
The School of the Arts dress code is thought to be sexist and not beneficial to the school environment, a recent poll showed last month.
According to the poll, which was given to only students, 69 percent of those surveyed think that the dress code is sexist, with 57.5 percent believing it favors males. An even larger number of people, 78.2 percent, replied that, the enforcement of the dress code was extremely inconsistent. To many female students at the school, the dress code feels like a personal attack.
“Every morning I walk into school hoping not to see Aspenleiter,” one sophomore girl said, “for fear that I get sent home over my fairly conservative shorts, but I see boys with pants at their ankles being greeted warmly. It just doesn’t feel right.”
The logic behind this shorts policy is, of course, that showing upper leg can be distracting to others. However, according to the poll given last month, less than 4 percent of students are distracted by thighs. To many, the harsh responses to “inappropriate” clothing choices are far more distracting than the clothes themselves.
“I don’t even think about the fact she’s wearing a coat until [administration] busts through the door confronting her about it. Just let her be. She’s just a little bit cold,” said one senior boy.
These instances which occur very frequently are leading to a sense of animosity towards the school administration, who seem to be ignoring any and all complaints they are getting. It is yet to be seen if any change will be achieved in reforming the code to meet the student’s wishes.
I really liked this article. Both your lead and headline were very well structured and drew me in. I liked your incorporation of statistics. I enjoyed that you didn't have a biased opinion, but you based it off of your poll. A very relevant topic.
DeleteWhen the media takes over family time
ReplyDeleteBy Starr Ryland- Buntley
In our technology crazed generation there is a large percentage of disconnection but also a large percentage of connection through the nation. But these same technologies that keep us connected also disconnects us the most. Think about when families used to sit down at a table or together in the family room and enjoying each other’s company but now everyone’s on their phones and they don’t talk, they don’t communicate they eat food play on their social media pages and disperse. Although staying connected with friends and family is great but it causes a great disconnect between close families, people who live together even friends at lunch don’t talk they stare at their phones the whole time there is never a wholesome conversation without some piece of technology being involved. We as humans are so stuck on computers and phones that some classes are solely based on doing work on the computer.